Luke's Artist Statement Assist

Overall it’s a good start. I feel like the first two paragraphs could be a bit shorter it almost sounds as if I’m reading a movie description. There is a lot of good build-up but it takes too long to get to you and your work. Talking about the work sooner can sometimes be more effective because people are busy and don’t read past the second paragraph sometimes. Also maybe talk about your material, clay, animation, drawing, etc. How to those materials influence and inform each other?  The second to last sentence starting with “Not recognizing your faults” is a bit winding and a little hard to follow. I did enjoy the third paragraph it starts to tap into who you are and why you address certain topics over others, however, you could dive a bit deeper. Furthermore, in the first sentence of the third paragraph, this might work a bit nicer,  “My work is focused on the issues, I have faced, observed, recognize and know I need to change about myself. Also, this part feels really nice to end “where you have to salvage from the remnants of a previous life in order to continue.” I’m still unsure if I like the first part of that sentence maybe that’s just my bias against the phrase “post-apocalyptic world” I find it a bit overused but the ending is good.